Happy Meal

The big critique has already been done, so I'll just give you a nice thorough review here. First of all, there's some grammar mistakes, such as commas and past-tense problems. ...

I thought that was a nice and light-hearted poem. Very nice, but you might want to correct some of the lines in there. For example: God offered him the power ...

Force me in that chair Strap me down and tell me what’s fair How my heart beats and what I’ve done wrong Holler how I’ve failed to sing God’s song ...

So, that's a 3-7-3 poem? I think it's like a haiku, but longer. Ok, the critique. First, the blank at the end of each line is confusing. Is it blanking ...

How to describe you at all You are a ______ I don’t know Why I’m such a masochist To feel for ____ I don’t know What pretentious love song fits ...